animatic & working out timing of shots

last time i found it easier to work out with toys (do again) and then write it all down going through the shots and time of them.

Here's a break down of the footage i put together to work out timings.
From editing together scrap scenes i was able to see that i have gone way wayyyy over the 1minute were suppose to do, but to be honest the footage we shot was longer than a minute! So i'll have to see if it's ok, i took some screenshots of what i guess i could shorten down or cut out if it comes too it.

I'm gonna go through my footage again and edit down these scenes to make it shorter, i've also had an idea to get rid of the scene at the end where the bear attacks Jeff, i think that the 'money shot' is really the part where the bears are howling and Jeff's like 'what the hell' - so really theres no need for the bear to get mad at the end. It will also save time too and put the focus more on the humour of the money shot.